Dream Girl

by Corruption   Jul 3, 2007


I had my dream girl
I really did
well she looked like her
in the beginning she even acted like her
but then she changed
she still looked like her
but she didn’t act like her
I thought I finally had her
the girl I always dreamed of
dark long hair
tanned skin
a smile so bright it lights the sky
she had all of that
but she lacked the respect part
and the caring part
and most important
the love part.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    You've written, yet again, a gorgeous love poem. Though it was short and fairly sketchy, it somehow delivered its bittersweet message quite well. Indeed, we usually put up unrealistic ideals; and the other person would try in vain to attain such exactness. In the end, there would be disappointment and heartbreak. Nice poem, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Liz

    If u figure out way u like her it will help u alot
    it seems like u like her cause of looks
    but i hope its not that

    please write back to me or comment on one of my poems or qoutes

  • 16 years ago

    by Lozbi

    That is a beautiful poem! Sad, but very good.
    5/5
    .x

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryan

    Its happens to us all, we think we are in love only to figure out we art not, tis a good poem, love the imagery of the girl of your dreams, i give it anothe 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    Wow this peom is soo great, wow. I feel the emotion, this girl just waisted everything she had if you almost had her. Stupidity, I could feel your emotion in the poem. It's fantastic!!
    I loved this part:
    "well she looked like her
    in the beginning she even acted like her
    but then she changed
    she still looked like her"

    you did a great job keenan!!
    keep it up

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