Comments : Love is a burden (Sonnetic)

  • 16 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Wow two sides of love in a hilarious way expressed. Thanks for the comment on mine. You have nicely written it with the fun element. Well deserved 5/5 dear

  • 16 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    I guess it was your first sonnetic fsams..but it's unbelieveable that you did it so professional

    I especially liked that repetitive lines;

    Never love and live in a garden
    If you cant carry the burden

    So meaningful
    Good job,
    Laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Fsams
    This is really a funny piece.

    And if you do it without condom
    You will lose all your freedom

    I really started laughing with these lines....LMAO.....how true :)
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Eternal

    Great poem. I have not read a poem like this before it is your style i think. Plse chk out my poem. Your poem is really nice. Tc

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    This poem was fairly amusing and delightful to read, indeed; plus, seeing a humorous piece written in a poetic form was uncommon these days. Additional props for that. :) Thanks for giving me a chuckle!

    Love,
    Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. it was nicely written, i am still laughing from it, lol. i didn't use a condom and i lost all my freedom to my 7 month old. it was nicely written and it was a pleasure to r/r/c this for you, 5/5 easy

  • 16 years ago

    by RavishingEruption

    That's good
    i don't know y it is in the funny genre but ok

  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I liked this one, it kind of held a message, but at the same time being quite funny and light about it.
    a good poem
    well done
    love Tara-Kay
    x

  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Nice job.. the flow was good as well as the word choice.. the whole idea wasnt that intruiging to me so its probably a 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    You've captured a lot of truth in this piece, love the metaphor and deeper meaning within this poem. Very well written.

    Peace, Poetry & Power,

    Gary Jurechka

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Lol. I liked it.
    It had good meaning to it, and was kinda cute.
    but, i didn't like the condom part.
    it kinda didn't fit the rest. well it did, but it didn't lol.

    if that makes sense.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sugar

    A very nice work! =)

  • 16 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    This one made me giggle. lol 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Krysten

    Another good one. this one holds truth in it, pure un sugar coated truth....beaneath beautiful words of coures antother 5/5 and please never stop writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by Quiet One

    It was funny, and was meaningful.

    Keep it up!
    5/5

    ~Quiet One

  • 16 years ago

    by Hatori

    Hehe, some parts made me laugh :D. The flow was great, and your choice of words complemented your own unique style :D!! I don't really know what else to say for this poem, except for keep it up, and 5/5

    Witha ll due respect,
    Hatori
    The Dreamer

    P.S. Thanks for the RRc on "Shalua and Skelke (ballade)"

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Another good poem! Flow was smooth, I like your choice of words, I also like the way you rhymed some lines, good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Never thought about it like that?
    really opened my eyes.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kristina

    I like your writing style. it's really good. and the poem was amazing. you did such a wonderful job writing it.

    ~Kristina

  • 16 years ago

    by Molly Elizabeth

    Oh I love this poem... very good job!! You are extremely talented! 5/5!!