No One Told Me

by Riz   Jul 9, 2007


(Friend's point of view)

You know, no one told me
That you have to go away
I couldn't save you in time
And you had to die that day

I didn't know
Because no one told me
You were fading
And I couldn't see it clearly

Because no one told me
I'm living in a lie
I have to wear this mask
Oh, why'd you have to die?

I had so many regrets
The one so far was you
I loved you so much
And the times we went through

But as I said no one told me
You were going to die that day
I didn't know and if I did
I would be the one to go away
And I would watch you everyday

But it's too late
Since no one told me
As I watched you that day
Tied up and on your knees

Because no one told me
Gun fire was heard
I hear your last breath
Now I'm alone in this cruel world

Until now, no one has told me
But then the next season
I met this girl, told her my story
and she gave me a reason
To move on

(My friend, she went through a lot. She saw her love one die in front of her eyes just about 7-8 years ago. He died before their marriage. Now, she wouldn't let anyone in to her life but I told her to move on. She did.
Note this to you all who has been through this tragic incident. You need to move on or you won't go anywhere in life. Don't worry, you're not alone. Your love on has always been with you.)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    This is very good.
    The flow was great and the emotion has showed.
    I liked it a lot.
    There was a lot of meaning and moral to this, great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Another beautiful poem! So much emotion here, it feels very heartfelt. Again it was a very plesant read! 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Aww how tragic. =( I also have had loved people die in my life all before I am to get married. It's no easy feat to get over, but eventually you do.

    The poem wass fantastic. Really good for not being the one seeing the death. It had enough description of the emotion but maybe you could go deeper. I don't know.

    Suggestion:
    [And I would watch you everyday]
    ^^I would personally take that line out. It's the only stanza (excluding the last) that has 5 lines. And it just seems kind of in the way for what you would say. But that's me. It's up to you.

    Other than that, great job. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 16 years ago

    by CompletelyIncomplete

    Very nice poem with feelings flowing well. Good word choice and the structure is great. Keep it up 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Kris,

    Though austerely written, the poem was carrying great weight of sorrowful sentiments, which gently stir across the page like swirling cherry blossoms in spring. The idea that one needs to move ahead through life encompasses a great Truth. It's nice to note how your poetry reflects an empathetic heart within you. God bless you and your friend.

    Take care,
    Marian

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