Watching Your Pain (To all those who went through so much!)

by Riz   Jul 20, 2007


(To all those who went through so much! Please read!)

I've always wanted to know
When the clouds rain
I was staring out the window
Watching your pain
It was painful enough to see
The times you've gone through
Everything came down on me
When I saw all that is true

I'm crying now
I feel sorry for you
And somehow
I want to be like you too

I need to know it
Before my eyes
At the peak of my limit
To just realize
How hard it was
To be you
And because
I need it too

The scars will heal
If you're not in isolation
So tell me how you feel
About the situation

I want to know
The times you went
And somehow
To try to repent
The darkness inside
Holding you down
You don't have to hide
You don't need to frown

I really do care
About you
That's why I wish I was there
To just be with you through

I can see your pain
As I stare out the window
Even in the rain
Still wanting to know
The times you went through
Before my eyes
I want to be like you
Just to realize

As I sit, still wanting to know
Every time the clouds rain
I'll be staring out the window
Watching your pain

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  • 16 years ago

    by silvertung69

    Feel my poems & you'll read my pain.
    It's dark down here.but your welcom.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    This was good.
    Your emotion didn't exactly spill out, this kind of poem would do wonderfully with much more descriptive words. I say that, this poem...the meaning. It had so much more to offer, I suggest don't hold back. With this story, try to just let it spill, don't try to rhyme it. It would be wonderful to rhyme, yet...that is when lots of experience with words come in. This kind of poem should be non-rhyming. So you can get every single detail, ever single word in your heart and just say what you need to say.
    It was still wonderful, I loved the story.
    Great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Very nice poem.. simple and common material were used yet you made it somehow unique in your sweet own ways.I love the sincerity of words spoken by a person with so much concern and care in here.rhyming scheme were okay, nice flow.

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    I thought this was very good.. very good imagary.. Very discriptive..

    I want to know
    The times you went
    And somehow
    To try to repent
    The darkness inside
    Holding you down
    You don't have to hide
    You don't need to frown
    This was my favorite part.. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This reminded me of the beginning of the cat in the hat.. sorry :P

    okay the weakest parts of this was the fact that you rhymed with the same words and that some of your lines were really short...

    but other than that .. it was amazing

    you put a lot of emotion into this. the only suggestion i have is to lengthen some of your lines and change up your vocabulary

    i really liked this part:

    I want to know
    The times you went
    And somehow
    To try to repent

    Excellent Job

    5/5

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