Pictures, Are they a clue?

by Natalie   Jul 12, 2007


On June 11, I was taking pictures
of myself and I wondered Will
they be on that shelf? I asked myself, will
they?

So I kept on going, untill the
going was gone, and when it was
gone I felt really weird I felt
as if I had been steered in the wrong
direction of life.

It was so, I had not taken any
pictures of my brother or my mom
and dad so i did so later
that night.

It made me feel like I had
been Steered again but this time in
the right direction of not being
self-centered.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Polaroid

    Very very very very good

  • 16 years ago

    by Jordan W

    You wrote an artistic peice of work that many wish they could put on paper,
    just try to make it flow some more like everyone said and dont make the senctences so long =-P
    i truly enjoyed the message in it and encourage you to continue writing. also dont be afraid to branch out into different styles of poetry. broadening your horizon can bring to you an infinite amount of paths to walk.

  • 16 years ago

    by Solace

    I loved the way that you wrote a message inside of this. Even if you haven't realised it yourself. So two thumbs up for sure, it's always nice to put those in there and you did a fine job doing so.

    :]

    5/5
    -beth

  • 16 years ago

    by Connie

    I agree with the others - I like the message you are going with in this poem ~ alot! The flow needs to be smoother, but keep writing because you choose great topics!

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    This was a good start.. I think if you work with this it could be a lot better.. Maybe try and brake it up a little bit and get it to flow a little better.

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