Erotic remorse

by KeyxMashingxParody   Jul 12, 2007


The enduring silence of the night,
Pleasures chills down a lowly souls spine.
Ever lasting life, my life exceeded the rest,
Measuring heart beats instead of time.

The erotic smell of remorse in the air,
Pleases the unedifying skin.
The flesh of our lovers eye,
Caressing yet not knowing where to begin.

I've seen the sorrows of many,
Yet all is too well in this world of love.
Screaming out for the repeating attention,
Only to find our throats soar and rough.

The enduring silence of the night,
Pleasures chills down a lowly souls spine.
Ever lasting life, my life exceeded the rest,
Measuring heart beats instead of time.

Hand in hand we follow orders,
Through and through we give into rule.
Trying to get through the day without a scratch,
Yet never taking the time to learn something new.

Pitiful pity, lifeless life, calming pain,
To the truth, all lies are in vain.

Heartless love, soulless passion,
Stating nothing, only to fashion.

Alabaster eyes, fearless fears,
Unforgivingly shedding tears...

The enduring silence of the night,
Pleasures chills down a lowly souls spine.
Ever lasting life, my life exceeded the rest,
Measuring heart beats instead of time...

... For time itself has no meaning....

-Liz-

YET ANOTHER of mine that I was hesitant to post, but my friends keep pushing me. they say this one is deep too, but I don't know. Let me know peeps.
Ty

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  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Wow...very impressive...i loved this wording and rhyming in this poem...

    i really enjoyed reading.

    good job! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Molly Elizabeth

    Very cool poem... beautifully written! Thanks for the poem comment you wrote me... it was a while ago so idk if you remember... sorry i didn't comment one of yours sooner... been super busy but i'll keep checking back and reading your poems... i love them!! take care :-)

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    "Pleasures chills down a lowly souls spine."
    `I think it is either pleasure or chill, is it not?

    Anyway, I think it was a fantastic piece of work. Overlooking the need of certain lines to be tightened up, I was relatively intrigued with the erotic theme that you'd employed; in fact, there was some sort of a dramatic and quixotic tale in between its lines, even if I can't thoroughly decipher its meaning. It's quite mystifying, yet poignantly written at the same time.
    Still, nevertheless, you did a rather brilliant job with this piece. Thanks for sharing. :] 5/5 ~Marian