...this is extremely emotional! I can't critique this! It's too darn painful and heart wrenching! I can understand about parents fighting and how it hurts. Anyways, I like the stanza where she prays. It almost made me cry, seriously! I could hear a voice of crying girl as she prays to god. It's fantastic. 5/5
That was absolutey amazing you dont even need comments you are fantastic i cant see whats to critisize! im just gob smacked thats just well makeing me speechless i cant find the words you are amazing and now 1 of my favourite writers!
I liked this one alot more then the last because the emotions you portrayed throughout it were beautifully sad, strong and powerful. You went into great depth with this piece to me I couldn't find any flaws what so ever. I'm sure so many people can relate to this as I know I can. Loved this. Definitly a good read and i'm sure an even better write. Well done. ~mel
Very powerful, greatly written. You portrayed emotions excellently, and the imagery is very vivid in the whole piece, I could picture the whole scene unfolding in front of my eyes. The flow is very good, too.
WOW!!! omg! this has gotta be the most amazing poem i ever read! i swear! the way you told was so sad and the ending was joyful... wow.. i'm totally speechless.. this poem is beyond words to describe how great this is.. BRILLIANT POEM!