by Marius Laun Jul 23, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
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As I fall |
by JustKristina
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I liked this one but some of the rhyming seem sort of forced.. but other than that it was really enjoyable to read!!! keep it up! :o] |
by Yvonne
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Wow! Good poem. The flow is good and the passion is right there! It has so much emotion that you can feel it all the way through the poem. Great job! |
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The message was evidently a fact and I agree with every word said. |
by Nix
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I don't like last stanza. This poem is amazing. Topic and message of this piece are great. It is unique and excellently written. |
by Alissa
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This was a great piece of art, the flow to this one was flawless just like the rhymes. You did a fantastic job, yet I would like to mention that you should place punctuation in your work, i find that...poetry without punctuation is like a song without a melody. I have learned that on this site, I hope my advice is of any help. I think that you are a great writer, keep writing! |