Maybe tomorrow

by Katrina   Aug 18, 2007


We all crash,
And it can just happen in a flash.
We all make mistakes.
And well all have aches.
But maybe tomorrow could be different.

I look at the bad side of things.
But maybe tomorrow I could grow wings.
I will try and look to the bright side.
And I could be untied.
Maybe I could be happy.

Things I are just piled up on my shoulder.
It makes me so much colder.
I will try and fix that.
Because I dont have to keep everything in a format.
Tomorrow I will try and be different.

But why tomorrow?
I have to much furry.
Why not start today?
It will make everything ok,
Much faster.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jaime

    Great message here! Wow.

    The rhyming might have been a little stretched, but honestly I was more focused on the content than the format. Very nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jakki HxC Self Mutilation

    REALLY GOOD! Very much emotion. Feelings I can relate to...LOVEEE 5/5
    -Jackie

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Alot of emotion, the flow is a bit off, try reading it to yourself, after not reading it for a day or so, that will help you find where the flow skips, other than that good work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Alissa

    Cute. This poem had much emotion, yet the flow was not exactly spot on. I suggest to add more descriptive words and focus on the flow. Those are the two key things you need to learn to turn a poem from good to GREAT!
    you did a good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Oh this one is beautiful.. i appreciate the meaning of this most especially in the last stanza "why not start today?.." the emotions were there cleary seen. the imagination were okay.

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