A Perfect Love Story. (rewrite)

by Miu   Aug 18, 2007


Starry night, a yellow full moon
Two lost souls meeting in this place soon.
An innocent love, joys they share.
Only about each other they really care.

There they walk, holding hands.
Rocky beach, toes in sand.
Lay in each others arms
Letting the sky loose its charm.

As the soft wind messing their hair,
Only, those two, sitting down there.
For each other they only have eyes.
Together flying through magical skies.
Warmth growing in their soul, deep,
Once again, their lips meet.
In this place so beautiful, so dear.
Things are said that voice of silence could only hear.

Softest skin. Cutest smiles
Their cheeks still a little bit shy.
Two lost souls,
Perfect stories are told.
Never leaving each other sight, till they grown too old.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cooper

    So I realized you're not on my favourites ... which shocked me. Decided to read a poem or two before I hit "Add to favourites" .... and glad I did.
    This was a very, very lovely poem Miu. I think I've just been beaten in the love poems category .... your wording is absolutely beautiful, and simply the perfect choice; Ah, I can feel the emotions.
    Good bloody job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Megamidget3

    Hey! beautifully done! see!? u CAN write love peoms! :D this poem is making ME jealous! ah! now i have to write something THAT good! lol, very very VERY nice poem, as long as u keep on the positive side, k? hugs! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I like this poem better. I find it really sweet, well done. I have one suggestion though.. try to put it into stanzas :)

    My Favorite line.
    Together flying through magical skies.

    Keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by ali

    That is a beautiful story, i really liked it, the way it was written was so natural and so flowing and it was so real in my mind's eye
    5/5 :) hugs for you!!!

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