Say The Word

by LovelyDivine   Aug 23, 2007


Lay Your World on Me -Ozzy Osbourne

Don't let it twist you up inside
Time never fails to make the heartache stop
You've go to let those feelings go
I'll give you everything I can if you say the word
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I know someone has brought you down
Trash-talking and cheating was their way,
Their way of showing that they didn't care.
They've caused you so much pain and heartache
Its hard for you to give away your heart
Baby stay with me and
...."Don't let it twist you up inside."

Its been months since you were with her
Seems as though you've had time to heal,
But the memories of her have yet to fade.
The thought of her makes you think
Love is never real and can't happen to you
Listen to me and soon you will learn,
...."Time never fails to make the heartache stop."

Now the time has finally come to let go
Move on with the life you now have without her.
You've got a girl who won't use or abuse you,
Loves you whole-heartedly and won't leave.
But you're still having problems with trust
Worrying about your girl hanging with guy friends,
...."You've go to let those feelings go."

This girl you got on your arm seems good
She'll do anything to make you happy.
Loves making you smile and seeing you laugh.
You do the same for her in return
Making sure everything's ok and nothing's wrong.
Turns out the girl you've got is me and
...."I'll give you everything I can if you say the word."

**This was my first attempt at a glosa verse, but I didn't realize that you had to have ten lines per stanza. So evidently, it's not a glosa verse.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    It's not the best I have read from you it didn’t have the flow or rhythm that I know you can give a poem.

  • I'm unsure if I like it or not, however there's some nice techniques and wording. I can't quite put my finger on it but there just seems to be something missing, the emotion is portrayed pretty well and the message is good.

    I'll give you a 4/5, I think it could be better but isn't too bad. Wel done :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Rose not your average

    It simple which is good it helped out the flow! but something is missing i dont know what but still good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by On Cupids Bad Side

    It's an original poem, I love the way it's written. It has good emotions, and a good message. Keep it up!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like it. Sorry but I really don't like it. You could express emotions better and this poem should be deeper.