Live or die

by judith redmount   Sep 2, 2007


A knife in my heart
A wound in my chest
Deliberately carried out
A purpose driven test

Misused my openness
Redirected my mind
I honestly trusted him
Or was I half-blind

While stabbing the knife
With a smile on his face
With a neat, loving voice
A thought to embrace

An organized planning
But by my God unfold
Carefully He showed me
Some items - in bold -

I could cry but thanked Him
For opening my eye
Preparing me for what's next
Whether I live of die

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Excellent poem for me. I loved the wording and the way you have written it. The rhymes are poetic and it great:)

    Tc
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I enjoyed this piece, but it could have flowed a little smoother for me, it can be hard to tell because I might not read it the same as you would, it was a good job though, nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sam Azam

    Nice structure and choice of words. Again, a tiny hint of mystery, I like that in your poems.

  • 16 years ago

    by lish

    Wow this is an amazing poem, the grammar and wording are excellent. the feeling and emotion is overwhelming

    well done

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    This poem left me speechless. Amazing write. Very powerful. You conveyed your emotions wonderfully. The flow was absolutely perfect.

    p.s. Spelling mistake in the last line. Should be "live or die" not "live of die". 5/5

    Take Care!

    -Shannon <3

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