He Helped Me Bury Him (Kyrielle)

So deep and touching poem, I could feel your emotions like they are my own! Wow! You expressed your feelings powerfully and I think that repetition of the line:-I am no longer his victim-add fantastic effect to this poem.

Damn...Greenie this is deep. So painfully deep. I love the emotion is the beginning...it seemed even in reading that it got easier toward the bottom. "I am no longer his victim" PERFECT REPEATING LINE!!!!! I haven't been by here lately...not sure why. I'm loving this...I'm having a freaking blast!!! NICE WRITE STEAMIE GREENIE!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thank you for an honest opinion because it will help me in the future when I try to write another one. No offense taken because that's what this site is all about...to express an honest critique/opinion to help other writers become better. Thanks guys.

Very powerful poem, with great wording and a lot of emotions inside. I know that kyrielle should have repetition, but it ruins the flow in this piece, maybe because the line -I am no longer his victim.- is shorter than other lines in stanzas. That's just my opinion, I don't want to offend you.
All in all, I really like the poem, it's greatly written and somehow complex.
Keep up :)
My favorite stanza is:

-Observed every waking hour
Home became lonely watchtower
Just when he believed he would win
I am no longer his victim-