Father Why Have You Forsaken Me?

by Darien   Sep 17, 2007


Father Why Have You Forsaken Me?

Twisted stories of famous fairy tales
A jig-saw or an enigma of some sort
Mysterious as the wind blowing in my hair
Searching for answers to why you weren't there

You said you would always be there for me
But you weren't there when I needed you
I am left here feeling sad and alone
And I know you will never return home

You have forsaken the one you loved most
I can't blame you for it wasn't your fault
Unexpected events destroyed what we had
Heaven has taken the man I called my dad

Inconsistent flashbacks conscripted in my mind
Marching freely and toying with all my emotions
Every now and then I would break down and cry
I miss you so much dad why did you have to die?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Fluffy

    "Heaven has taken the man I called my dad...
    Inconsistent flashbacks conscripted in my mind
    Marching freely and toying with all my emotions
    Every now and then I would break down and cry
    I miss you so much dad why did you have to die?"

    These last few lines really reminded me of Dylan Thomas's 'Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night'. Heartfelt, emotive and delivered brilliantly through your choice of diction and imagery. The rhyme scheme and structure are consistent throughout. Well done, Daniel.

    HAHA :) x

  • 16 years ago

    by Tabitha

    Wow! this was very deep. I'm impressed! keep up the great work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Aussie

    Amazing!!
    i like how the poem hav many twists. the ending was a shock. it sound as if u're talking to me. lov ur style of writing:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Angie

    You have expressed a lot of emotion in this write. Very heartfelt, many people question the whys of when someone leaves us in this way, we tend to get angry when we need them and they're not there and thats when we question it.... well done D, well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This is a very emotional poem. 5/5 It's very good, though.

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