A Fragment of Heaven {Haiku}

by Marc Ortiz   Sep 17, 2007


In a tranquil park
He gazes at the bright sky
As the breeze collide

Haiku - A Japanese form of poetry. It has to be about nature and the syllable count is 5-7-5

*My First Haiku :D*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hebe

    Great haiku!
    Word choice was beautiful.
    Very nice work!
    Take care

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This haiku was wonderful! So much simplicity and feeling are here! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    I love haiku's. In such simple lines, a whole story can be told, this is no exception..
    Fabulous!
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by kIROS DELA VEGA

    I love how you're unique and use such detail in your work

  • 16 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    I like the last line the most -Beautiful

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