Comments : A Teddy Bear's Enterprise.

  • 12 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    I love how you took something so simple and was able to show the complex meaning it can have to someone...very hard thing to do but you pulled it off, amazing work, keep it up!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Wow. thats such a perfect, cute and stable poem. 5.5 you well deserved this because this poem was just so quante. Very descriptive and interesting.

    you should be proud of this
    :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Spirit

    I couldn't find anthing wrong
    5
    great poem

  • 12 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Wow... that was amazing. So unique and yet so simplistic. The flow was great and I could picture every minute of that poem. Keep up the amazing work!

  • 12 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Wow. this was fabulous. its unique and cute. i am not sure what to saw about this one. im adding it to my favorites though.

  • 12 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    the entire thing is great, the imagery is right as well as the whole concept..every lines is well describe..it rhymes so well..

    keep it up!

  • 12 years ago

    by MeeyCie

    Cute poem. very sweet and I liked it.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lisa

    This poem is absolutely adorable. I absolutely loved it, it flowed together perfectly and the wording was just right. It made me think of tucking in my children and how beautiful it actually is. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Aww I found it sweet and I rarely feel that way about anything. it was perfectly written and heartwarming storyline. The rythm and rhyme was very well done. another poem that leaves images in my mind that make me smile. well done 5/5

    The pocket fiend!

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    It flowed really great, The only part where it lost a little bit of flow was at the end, I still loved it though, great poem, great writeing, you really got a tallent here,
    it was a different style then most people on here, They usually write about the same old stuff, I like this one it had the old poet style in it
    Great Write,
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Pesamenteiro

    Wonderfully written, I didn't see anything wrong except...is there a reason it's written different at the end? it just seemed to throw it off a bit. There's not much I can say that hasn't already been said.

    Very unique. I loved it!!!
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Sweet Fragility

    Again, an original write. I love the imagery created, especially over something so minor and sweet. Not forced, great flow.
    5/5
    ~ Lainey

  • 12 years ago

    by ABake

    This was really cute. You gave me a great image in my mind.Your flow was flawless and I really loved the whole idea of this poem. Great job!
    5/5

    Amber...

  • 12 years ago

    by kIROS DELA VEGA

    Loved the poem, it was beautoifully written, and the word choice was flawless, wonderful work on this my friend, keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    It's more of a story than a poem but it was a great piece =)

    I really love the opening lines it really grab my attention. well done.

    What I like in this poem is the rhymes, keep up the good work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Blissful

    Awww this was just so beautiful! The story you told just blew me away of how you took something so simple that people take for granted and turned it into a masterpiece. I feel like this could be in a childrens book that could be read to them before they fall asleep because there was something so tranquil about it. I felt safe after reading this, like everything is going to be alright...beautiful.

    The ending was flawless, so sweet and wonderful that I wanted to read this over and over. Your rhyming flowed nicely and nothing seemed forced or out of place. Your beginning was so beautiful with its descriptions and imagery that I was hooked from right there.

    Thank you for sharing, I am glad I read this.

    Well done.
    *5/5*