This poem is absolutely adorable. I absolutely loved it, it flowed together perfectly and the wording was just right. It made me think of tucking in my children and how beautiful it actually is. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face. 5/5
Aww I found it sweet and I rarely feel that way about anything. it was perfectly written and heartwarming storyline. The rythm and rhyme was very well done. another poem that leaves images in my mind that make me smile. well done 5/5
It flowed really great, The only part where it lost a little bit of flow was at the end, I still loved it though, great poem, great writeing, you really got a tallent here,
it was a different style then most people on here, They usually write about the same old stuff, I like this one it had the old poet style in it
12 years ago
Wonderfully written, I didn't see anything wrong except...is there a reason it's written different at the end? it just seemed to throw it off a bit. There's not much I can say that hasn't already been said.
Awww this was just so beautiful! The story you told just blew me away of how you took something so simple that people take for granted and turned it into a masterpiece. I feel like this could be in a childrens book that could be read to them before they fall asleep because there was something so tranquil about it. I felt safe after reading this, like everything is going to be alright...beautiful.
The ending was flawless, so sweet and wonderful that I wanted to read this over and over. Your rhyming flowed nicely and nothing seemed forced or out of place. Your beginning was so beautiful with its descriptions and imagery that I was hooked from right there.