Death Come... [Quadrilew]

by Twisted Heart   Sep 23, 2007


Death come... slowly creep
Within my tainted soul
My tattered heart weeps
Feeling empty and cold

Within my tainted soul
Now a vacant light
A dark reflected glow
Pitched against the night.

My tattered heart weeps
Red teardrops fall like rain
Invading my sleep
As I rise up in pain.

Feeling empty and cold
I shiver from fear
My heart a blackened hole
Filling up with tears.

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Created by C. G. V. Lewis, the Quadrilew is a form of quatrain poem with an abab rhyming scheme,
repeating lines, and contains an alternating syllable structure.

In the first verse, the poet may either start with a five or six syllable line. If the choice is five then
the 'sounding' syllable count is (and opposite if the count is six):

VERSE ONE,
Line 1, 5 syllables.
Line 2, 6 syllables.
Line 3, 5 syllables.
Line 4, 6 syllables.
VERSE TWO,
Line 1, (which is a REPEAT of line 2 of the FIRST verse) has 6 syllables.
Line 2 new line of 5 syllables
Line 3 new line of 6 syllables
Line 4 new line of 5 syllables.
VERSE THREE,
Line 1, (which is a REPEAT of line 3 of the first verse) has 5 syllables.
Line 2 new line of 6 syllables.
Line 3 new line of 5 syllables.
Line 4 new line of 6 syllables.
VERSE FOUR,
Line 1, (which is a REPEAT of line 4 of the first verse) has 6 syllables.
Line 2 new line of 5 syllables.
Line 3 new line of 6 syllables.
Line 4 new line of 5 syllables.
If the first line of verse one has 6 syllables then the pattern is
Verse 1, 6565,
Verse 2, 5656,
Verse 3, 6565,
Verse 4 5656: (the rhyme pattern still being abab.)
If wishing to create a longer poem then the next verse (5) must be a completely fresh set of four lines,
these being used as before in the following three verses. Etcetera, etcetera.

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  • 16 years ago

    by My Decadent

    Very nice style and very emotional write.
    Again, good flow and rhymes. You seem to be very good at that.
    Keep it up with the different styles. You do a good job on them.

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    A very difficult form to use, but you pulled it off flawlessly, the imagery throughout this piece is incredible

    Feeling empty and cold
    I shiver from fear
    My heart a blackened hole
    Filling up with tears."

    that stanza is amazing, great worK!

  • 16 years ago

    by geeeeee

    I havent heard of this style of poetry either but its always good to know that there are poetry lovers willing to give new things a go and bring them to our attention. I liked the whole structure of the poem, how certain lines were repeated it ended up being really effective in creating a dark mood. The wording was great. An emotive write

    Take Care.

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I'd never seen or heard of this form of poetry before, but I like it. I'm not really one for styles of poetry which have fixed syllable counts, but I really enjoyed this.

    It was very sad, very emotional.

    Well written.