Dancing In Red

by Wake   Sep 23, 2007


Like a thousand romances ,
her eyes spoke hopelessly.
was she looking for someone?
but then she looked at me...
. An angel in devil's color
. through her eyes you could see in her soul
. And know that every part
. was just as pure as the whole.

Don't ask me how it was,
or how it began.
Found myself lost in the atmosphere
rekindled by her hands.
. Her body strumming through air
. as she started to dance.
. It was hard to believe
. but its seemed like , deliverance.

And she moved to the rhythm
with the moon in her eyes.
All the angels and demons
cried for existence , alike.
. And i sat there , a mortal.
. my heartbeat in my head.
. And i watched her immortal,
. Dancing in red...

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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, greatly written poem, with so powerful descriptions and atmosphere from the beginning to the end. You managed to create very vivid imagery, truly unique. Whole piece is great, but the last stanza is my favorite, so effective.
    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I like it. it flowz well. :]] 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Of Sweet Insanity

    The rhythm was OUTSTANDING and the titlt totally catch me eyes. OH And the words you used were absolutley beautiful. The image I get while reading is phenomenal and you just.. You wrote it so well OMG I loved it. Effing amazing!!!
    ~!~ VaNiLLa PaiN ~!~
    AKA
    **Heather**

  • 16 years ago

    by Lithium

    Your lines have a great rythem to them and your words are put really well together and create very nice imagery, i luv your idea in this poem its very well put together, xox lithium

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    Nice work, flows nicely.
    5/5

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