Songbirds Flying High (Double Sedoka)

by Bryan   Oct 4, 2007


Songbirds Flying High

Trees sway in the wind,
Tranquility in the air,
Abyss slowly consuming.

And the rain falls down,
Drowning out this sad sorrow,
the sun sets in this red sky.

Happiness in hate,
Melodies playing these songs,
Little songbirds flying high.

Innocent they sing,
Such beautifully sad tunes,
The moon rises against night.

The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Bryan
    Great job on this poetry form. Great Imagery.
    Take care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really loved this piece Bryan. The inagery portrayed was quite beautiful. Your word choice amazing. Why is this not a 5!? Well you know what i'll be giving it. Great style, gorgeous poem.

    Well done. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I love this. I don`t know about them others that downrated it, but I for one, love it lol. The imagery and wording was great, you do an awesome job at the style Hun, keep it up.

    5.5
    :]