Inside my head

by Veamm   Oct 5, 2007


Inside my head

My blood moving around my veins
passing through my black heart
Posting memories of my past
the scars created by my gun

I wanted to disperse my feelings
to break loose from this chains
Sip my own tears and cry blood
to erase and throw away my pains

The end of all thing to come
a start and the finish of myself
The beginnings and the endings
of things inside of this head

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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very powerful and effective, with good words usage. You expressed emotions greatly, created flawless flow in the whole piece.
    I can relate to some parts of this poem.
    My favorite stanza is:

    -I wanted to disperse my feelings
    to break loose from this chains
    Sip my own tears and cry blood
    to erase and throw away my pains-

    Great job on this piece.
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsey

    It was really good.
    I loved it, short but sweet.

    Keep it up.
    xoxo
    --CHelsey

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Very powerful! You displayed very deep depression with this poem, and it really crawls into readers soul. Amazing. Your wording is just perfect!
    Flawless!
    5/5 Keep up

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    This was great and so deep. I could feel the emotion throughout it all. The flow was kinda shaky but it words you used were strong.

    fave line -- so powerful
    "Sip my own tears and cry blood"

    well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    It was an awesome piece. the mind can
    become over loaded and alot of people
    can relate to this. nice piece. 5/5

    nikki

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