Bleeding Crimson Rain

by NyellMoonlight   Oct 12, 2007


Magma waves cleanse the heart,
bleeding crimson rain my soul will sever;
traces of ashes moan to the confusion
cause this moment's ours- now and never.

Auras are melting through the laced gloves,
igniting crystals of frozen light;
crescent- shaped emotions neglect fears
slowly fading, disappearing from sight.

Would you be my guide, please
through the meadows turned to stone?
With the heart on the sleeve I surrender
while the fire rages in bones.

Scarlet venoms drip on silver spoons,
stars quiver last confessions;
hues of red entwine with the eyelashes,
drenching within satin expressions.

Magma waves cleanse the heart,
bleeding crimson rain my soul will sever;
traces of ashes moan to the confusion
cause this moment's ours- now and never.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    I love how you repeated the first stanza in the last stanza. It just totally grabbed the readers attention as an opening and topped the poem off as an ending.

    I like the fact that you painted a vivid picture and used details to be so descriptive.

    The third stanza:
    "Would you be my guide, please
    through the meadows turned to stone?
    With the heart on the sleeve I surrender
    while the fire rages in bones."

    ^^Grasbbed my attention the most. Largely because I have felt this way so many times and was left wanting to surrender my life for a moment that seemed forever frozen in time.

    Overall.. good job!

    ~~Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    The first stanza was amazing, even the first line. I'm glad I got to read it again at the end lol. Which, by the way, was a perect way to end this amazing piece. I feel like i just keep repeating myself but, I will say it again... great imagery and amazing vocab. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Wow, this was beautiful my favourite by far. I loved the first line it capturvated me. Really well done with your poems xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Amazing work! No words to describe how good this poem was! Just beatiful! all i can say is wow, and i wish i could write this good! You have a gift! Keep up the great work! Rate this a ten!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaz

    Hmm im nt really gttn a clear picture here.. but ur wrds r soo. deep.. i mean.. they just attract the reader.. the way u play with wrds.. its like u mastered poetry.. srslly. ur epoems r awesome.. like othrz.. this goes fr 5/5 gr8 skiill