Lies of smoke

by Kenneth   Oct 26, 2007


Dont believe all that you breathe
Lies fill the air like smoke
Causing you to cough choke

Getting lost in the growing haze
Lies billowing from smoke stacks
Of factories set up in maze
Following the false tracks

Everything is meant to be a deception
Falsifiable truth is all in perception
Feeling and words all products
Sold to you for truth interception

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  • 16 years ago

    by X Kashies Misery X

    "Causing you to cough choke"

    something could be done there....seems a little corny =S if u no what i mean

    second paragraph could be structured a little better

    the last paragraph i think it smartly written, the way that you have managed to keep the flow and the sense bit and u also added long/ complicated words which was quite good.

    But just putting forward a question...

    It seems so untidy i mean, your tittle says lies of smoke and...its like.....goes off track and backon and stuff....idk i mean maybe it is suppose to be left for interpretation or something....idk im confused....all i no is that...you dont want ur reader to be confused? unless u tell them that it might be confusing? 0_0

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