So fake

by NearlyCrazy6   Nov 1, 2007


I look at this picture
It shows nothing
Not how she felt, or looked
Which amounts to nothing

I see a glamorous girl
The one with the 'best personality'
who is just SO pretty
But it's not really reality

The girl who has it all
But doesn't use the guys
Goes through life one day at a time
Oh she is just so wise

She makes the grades
And is just so smart!
So pretty, so fabulous
Like a fake work of art

I wish she would go away
Her lies make me frown
This can't keep going up
It has to go down

The thing that saddens me the most
Is that I know she is so sad
So confused, that she has to hide
Right now it has to be so bad!

I have to put this picture away
It makes me blind, I cannot see
But I can't stand that one little fact
This picture is of me. . .

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  • 16 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    That is a great poem keep it up =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    I give it 5/5 i can see the potential u had made in this poem. the sadness are truly deep and it has a great meaning!

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The emotional impact of this piece was pretty deep to tell you the truth. I really found the emotions to be portrayed with such sadness. Your word choice simple yet effective and I liked the meaning behind this. I do agree with above posters on the structure I think if you changed it a little bit it would make the flow seem alot better. Overall a 4/5~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    It is a really descriptive poem, its quite apparent from the start that this is going to be a really emotional piece. I think you definitely did a good job of getting not only your point across but of getting your emotions out.

    Strugles a bit in the structure department, which is a shame as the title and storyline are really bold. Maybe you should attempt writing something sticking to a rigid style?
    Just a little suggestion.

    Overall its an enjoyable poem to read, with some improvements .. could be great.

    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow...I too have a poem like this so I can easily relate you did a good job but the second to last stanza through me off a little bit 4.5/5

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