A Senryu to being alone

by The Herald   Nov 2, 2007


Sitting by myself
i am without you, alone
sleep comes through crying

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I have only tried this style once, and failed miserably.

    Yet here, you have masted it beautifully and manage to make it look so effortless and easy.

    You managed to pack in so much depth and emotion in a relatively short form, and that isn't always easy to do.

    You did a wonderful job with this piece.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    This is a Senryu. Which is Haiku, but written on emotion. A Haiku is written about nature, with this form. I love both. And you did this one well. With such short poems though, word choice is vital, so stronger words are better. However, you didn't do such a bad job. The last line added a nice touch. Well done.

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    I still love these short poems, the way
    you expresse them in such a beautiful way,
    it was awesome, nicely written piece.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Birgit

    Beautiful Haiku.. it expresses your ( ? )feelings/emotions. And I just love that in poems/quotes/haiku's.. whatever =P So, good job!
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    I liked this. haikus arent really up my alley, too short. but this was quite intriging. 4.5