I see him

by alwayssofresh16   Nov 5, 2007


I see him from across the room
my heart starts beating fast
it's like it's trying to get out
how long will this feeling last

I see him walking down the hall
and slip him a little note
I wonder what he was thinking
about the words I wrote

I see him siting down in class
not saying a word to me
then I start to think aloud
I might just know the key

I have to go and talk to him
and tell him how I feel
this will really show me
if the feelings I have are real

If you comment be as honest as can be so I know what I have to work on.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nigel Oliver

    This was really good, the flow worked really well.

    But your format of each stanza should be fixed.

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Very beautiful poem, but it had the grammatical errors, also. "Wounder" is spelled "wonder" and there are a few other words. Good poem though. 4/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by Whitney

    Its really good.. i love it. 5/5

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