Two loves

by alwayssofresh16   Nov 5, 2007


I have two loves in my life
cant pick which one I want
and when I tell my friends about it
they tell me not to front

"But I'm not" I tell them
they both are very nice
its not like playing a game
you just don't roll the dice

and be happy with the on you choose
as you site there and long
about if you made the right choice
or was it very wrong

but I picked who I thought was right
and it went very well
but was it the right choice
I can really tell

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  • 16 years ago

    by alwayssofresh16

    I put this poem together the way it is for a reason but thanks for the advice

  • 16 years ago

    by alwayssofresh16

    I fixed the grammer and put this one in stanzas... thnx for the help

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    I think that you need to go over some mistakes here in grammer and spelling. Although that, the idea of this poem is something many can relate to. Nice work 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nigel Oliver

    You made some grammar errors in your poem.

    The flow of the poem should be better.
    And the format of your poem could be better

    If you fixed that this poem would be an ok poem..

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Again, the flow was off and there were grammatical errors. If you put these into stanzas, it would look better. 3/5 for now.

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

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