Unhinged

by Vincent Thornsberry   Nov 9, 2007


He writes with perfect precision
Even while making an instant decision
He has to decide
On whether to hide
All that has happened to him
On that womens every whim
She had him used
Then abused
She made him hide it
From all who had any wit
If they found out
She would not be about
About the world of life
Where she's caused so much strife
They would have killed her for what she'd done
Now shes turned and tried to run
If shes caught
The battle's over without being fought
So now she runs to save her life
She is running from her own strife
The one thing she loved to cause
Is now the thing that makes her pause
Now shes stumbled and down she goes
Now shes caught as they stand on their toes
While they wait in line to exact revenge
For all the lives she tried to unhinge

@ Vincent Thornsberry 2008

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  • 16 years ago

    by Polaroid

    Wow this was really great, keep it up,
    i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
    I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
    Polaroid
    p.s GREAT JOB

  • 16 years ago

    by Polaroid

    Wow this was really great, keep it up,
    i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
    I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
    Polaroid
    p.s GREAT JOB

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    The only thing I didn't like about this was the repeated use of "She."

    It kind of put me of a little.

    Other than that, I thought this was beautifully written.

    Flow was okay throughout, the imagery you portrayed in here is wonderfully displayed, it creates some very vivid visuals for the reader and I thought the concept was original and unique.

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