Shining Love

The Sun is bright, and cant be matched
All thought true, until attached

This attraction of mine created a shining love
The light so bright, began to push and shove

In my head it shoved all out, till it was an empty space
Now when i look at this empty space,
Its been filled so perfectly by your smiling face

Now this new shine of love has finally arrived,
And so the sun should find a place to run,
cause when these people see us together
its like a new day has come

People say that i should pray,
And to give thanks to god

All i thank him for is my peaceful slumbers,
and for letting brooke give you my cell phone number.

With this shinning love i care not about war.
I care about my feelings for you,
As our loves begins to soar.

-this is a poem written by one of my best friends.
he wrote it for/about his girlfriend.
&& i thought it was worth posting. :]
comment? xoxo.
-ill return the favor.

this is the first poem he's ever written.
[i need some feedback for him]