Unsought Lust

Wow. Honestly, I can't say anything here that hasn't already been said. Amazing job. Very captivating. I loved this. Beautiful writing and just a great job done. The emotion here is so strong, amazingly portrayed to readers.. Wow

This is such a beautiful poem, the rhyming is amazing, everything fit so perfectly and it seemed well planned out. The only thing i would change is in the line: It literally feels as though, you broke my heart in two.
I would change 'literally' to honestly to make it fit a little better, but other than that it was completly flawless :)
(sorry it took so long to comment, ive been busy)
~RayLeen 5/5

A very emotional piece
It felt great reading it because of your choice of words that flowed so beautifully
The rhymes really were flawless
And i loved reading it.

"Every time I think about you, my heart begins to break.
The hurt you placed upon my life, put everything at stake.
For the first time, I began to feel hopeful; hopeful for you.
But then you turned around, and all my fears came true."

-The rhymes where perfect. The third sentence kind of threw the rhythm a bit, but nothing major.

"Every time you're near me, my heart begins to race.
And lust begins to surface, for your perpetual embrace.
To feel the warmth of your lips, of an inescapable kiss.
Allowing me to fall deeply, into an everlasting abyss."

-"Inescapable kiss" was the perfect touch. I don't think I've ever seen those two words used in the same sentence before. Nicely done.

"Every time I feel you, I suppress the tears from falling.
I repress the pain inside, and resist the urge of calling.
I can feel my grip on reality, slowly fading to the past.
And who knows how much longer my sanity will last."

-My favorite stanza. There's absolutely nothing wrong with it. Your choice of words were amazing.

"Every time I see you, memories flash before my eyes.
I hide the hurt it causes, with my so-beautiful disguise.
It literally feels as though, you broke my heart in two.
And now I can't let go, because I fell so hard for you. "

-Often time I find the endings in poems a bit disappointing, because I feel as though the author didn't end it strongly enough or it just leaves the reader hanging. Yours didn't disappoint. Great job, I mean it.

Very catchy. None of the words that were chosen could be changed to make it better. Falling for someone that you know is not right.. well, shxt happens.. I know, it happened to me. And when you think about them it's like you want to hurt them but you can't because.. you love them. It's a strong topic. Good Job (: