In a butchered shop having a cage of hens.
Butcher picks one of them every day cut their head
Remaining hens watching this process every day
Each hen know that one days they will be cut it down
Once, one of them falls ill.
She was suffering from terrible pain
None of them bothered her.
She told them why are you not curing me?
They told her that one day butchered will kill you.
You have to die then why you want to get well.
I donâ€™t know when the butchered will kill me.
May be tomorrow or it can be month
Then why I shall die today?
I will live until I can
They said ok and starts her cure
Within two or three days she gets well
And the next day butchered man come and
Put his hand into the cage of hens.
Pick one them and cut her head
Her blood splash on the cage and
Here head fell on the floor.
It was the same hen,
And other were watching or waiting for
(Massage: Live until then you can
In this poem I am try to put henâ€™s pain and their courage)
Well ur title really caught my eye...i read it thoroughly...good depiction of thoughts going in the mind of a hen..I guess the grammar and all hardly matters cause it's your thought that really speaks louder than any words... and i understand it. So I gave it a 5 on 5.
Hey i like the theme.. Maybe you need some help... No doubt the concept is nice, but still there are certain areas where you need correction. grammar is one such area. spell error are ok... but i like your concept. njoi!