Temptations

Uhmm,, I feel like you focused too much on the rhymes And the vocabulary. I don't feel your voice in it. hence some lines turned out to read strange..
Some sound off but overall was an ok piece.

Why don't you give it a try to free style?

A few lines are a bit.. weird. But I think if you rewrite them it would make the poem sound better and flow better. But on the plus side.. The words you used were strong and the poem was full of meaning. Great write.

Pretty good. It started out rhyming, but, maybe you just nixed it in the end?
I liked the last stanza most, btw. It was beautiful.
Oh, suggestion! This line sounds sorta funny:
"Your tongue suffers much hunger"
It's a bit awkward, and pauses the poem. Maybe if you reworded it? Try "suffers from hunger," "from the hunger" or... Somethin.
Haha.

Very true! The language you used was powerful and fit the poem perfectly. The meaning and depth here was wonderful, which made the poem quite effective. Well done *5/5*

I love your rhyme scheme and your word picking. Very well written poem.

Your tongue suffers much hunger
aiming for any greedy amusements
Shout such lies and do bad things
for the sake of your advancements

This is the most powerful stanza. I'm impressed with the emotion you put in it!!! Worth 5/5!!!