Ur my best freind

by Emily   Dec 22, 2007


Your on my mind all day and night
my thoughts of you are filled with fright
you told me what you did with the blade,
and how you said you cut it really deep

my eyes began to water,
as tears ran down my cheeks,
for the fear of losing you
is greater than any fear

you are my best freind
and your supposed to be there
with me until the end

but the way your acting
is starting to scare me
because without you
there is no me

you are what keeps me going
when i am down
and you always help me out.
I'm so scared for you, as i am for myself

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Hmm very inspiring piece! seems really has a deep emotions and very sincere! all the lines was so true and very emotional. keep up the good work and keep on writing all what u feel..5/5

    god bless!

  • 16 years ago

    by twistedlover

    I view this poem as a 3/5 because i didnt see alot of poem structure, and i felt u held ur emotions back, but i did see that you are trying and i respect that so keep up the good work, nice word choice btw.
    Go comment 3 of myne now this is my 2nd comment 4 u

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    I like this poem.
    the thought/idea of the poem was sweet.
    it kinda started out with a nice flow.
    but then wandered off. but still.
    a good write. :] 5/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked what the poem stood for
    My friend and I also went through this
    and we both felt what you did at one point
    I hope you and your friend get through it
    Structure wise
    to help get your poem into better shape
    you may want to have the same number
    of lines in every stanza
    make the rhymes more clear
    if your going to rhyme
    and work on the flow
    and the imagery
    4/5
    nice work
    kaila

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    The meaning of the poet are great but it flowed off but i believe u can make it better coz i understand its just ur starting so keep it up!!

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