Christmas Promise

by Alexandra Jade Brewer   Dec 26, 2007


Merry Christmas Ho Ho Ho
Watch the lights look at the snow
Bright and colorful; fluffy and cold
This new relationship can never grow old

Come sit beside me warm by the fire
Look in my eyes see the desire
Getting lost, deep in your heavenly presence
That cause me to lose control of all my senses

Hold me close in your arms tonight
Just for once don't leave my sight
I cant explain any of these feelings
That make my heart go constantly reeling

I glance down slowly at a beautiful ring
My hearts found love and I'm ready to sing
I've lost all sense of right and wrong
But I'm not worried cause your my hearts new song

Heres a promise one that I will keep
It comes from my heart, comes from somewhere deep
I promise to love you... forever and a day
And so many words can't fully explain what I have to say

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  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Wow another great poem!
    i hope you realize how great of a writter you are!!!
    5/5

    <3 i love you silly

  • 16 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    Naw it was to cute. and yes i have to say it, (only because people pick on me for it :[) punctuality!!! Otherwise perfect. The emotions are great.
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Oh that was very fantastic! it really made me smile in the first line seems funny and sweet! very creative 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Aww, this was such a beautiful poem. I love the way you explaining the feeling of a christmas day. Great job! 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Cute. :]

    Firstly I suggest adding in comas, full stops etc.

    Secondly ;

    "Look in[to] my eyes [,] or [;] see the desire,"

    I think that line needs a break, Makes it much more strong. If that makes sense? Heh.
    And "into" flowed better if you put the coma/semi-colon in. :]

    "I cant explain any of these feelings,
    That make my heart go constantly reeling."

    The flow was off in this couplet, Maybe rearrange the words a few times to create a flow that fits in with the entire poem?
    It's the only point of the poem I felt the flow was forced.

    Good job all in all. (=

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