The fall *contest =]!!*

by Birgit   Jan 2, 2008


This poem is about a dream in which you fall and face your mistakes.

Right there, you go.
You see yourself dropping.
So fast, so slow.
It's a never ending nightmare.

The fall brings you to all your mistakes,
You never wanted to see,
It forces you to change them,
There is no time to flee.

You are forbidden to walk away this time,
Forbidden to close your eyes.
The fall forces you to look at your mistakes,
There is no time for disguise.

And as you fall deeper,
You realise more and more,
What a nightmare you're having,
There is no time to soar.

And at last, you hit the ground.
The fall has made you seen,
The bad things you do in life,
Will also come back in a dream.

The fall now, has put you eye to eye,
With the things you wished you had never done.
Are you dealing with regret and loneliness?
Wake up and it'll all be gone.

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  • 17 years ago

    by HolyDiver

    I like this cuz i actually had a dream like that last night and this depicted it perfectly

  • 17 years ago

    by Birgit

    Hehe, oops =P

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    A great poem!
    Wonderfull written.
    I believe you'll have to face the bad things you've done, that could happen in your dreams, I think..

    My favourite lines are also:
    " The bad things you do in life,
    Will also come back in a dream. "
    Those were really good.

    Anyway, really enjoyed reading this.
    Let me know if you won the contest =)
    Take care!

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I also experience this myself :( Well it flowed well, good job. I have one suggestion :)

    Uhm...

    In every 1st line of each stanza I think it would be better if... You use a 'line' that repeats in every other stanza.
    ^^ This is just a suggestion. (It's really hard to change a poem if it's already done.)

    My favorite part in this poem is..

    The bad things you do in life,
    Will also come back in a dream.
    ^^ I really love those two lines! :)

    Anyway I hope you'll win the contest! Keep writing! =D

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