by Alexandra Jade Brewer Jan 12, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
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Ring... |
by Kaila
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Aww cute I loved the sound noises and everything thrown in here it was a really nice little aww poem haha nice work |
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The flow was very good, and the rhyming only seemed a little forced in one place, but i mean who doesnt have trouble rhyming sometimes. I liked the overall thought of it, and the want and the comfort. a well deserved 5/5 |
by lish
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The flow of this poem was amazing i love it ! |
by TamborineMan
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Consistent flow, and an enjoyable read. However, I'm confused why you switched to 3rd person narrative at the end... surely it was not to offer up a secret confession since the 3rd person lines are no more revealing than the rest of the poem?... just a thought. Thanks for the read! |