Comments : Her wish

  • 16 years ago

    by HollyNichole

    Aw i feel like that sometimes. keep up the good work

  • Aw, this was such a great poem. One of the best saddest love poems I've ever read. The imagery was great. This will definately go into my favs! 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexander

    I love the imagery you put into this poem, it was very easy to simpy picture this girl standing on a hill with the wind blowing through her hair. The flow was one of magnificent rhythem. The twist at the end was the perfect way to finish this lovely piece of work off. Keep up the good work my friend. 5/5

    Signed,
    Alexander

  • 16 years ago

    by jLegendc

    1st to 3rd stanza i didn't really had an idea what you're talking about.. the ending showed me the meanign of your poem.. the ending blew me away when you said "the paragraphs above
    were nothing but lies
    she could only wish
    he saw her from those eyes.."
    love this poem! =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    Awwwwww, this was again an amazing poem by you, i love how you started it out, like looking at the girl and then finished as if you wished he could see her through those eyes, it was perfectly penned, another well deserved 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    Wow, what a shocking ending. It all was described so well, the reader can truely believed that the boy found his true love, until the last paragraph shattered it in a blow. A great work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    I could totally relate to this amazing poem, i loved it.

  • 16 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    I love the twist at the ending. It starts as a sweet love poem this ends with a sad realization. Very good and not what I'd expected. <3

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Aw okay now this is so much better.
    So cute and sweet. I really enjoy reading
    love poems. Stil straigh tot he point give
    your reader a challenge next time you
    write a poem. But other than that great
    write.
    5/5
    <3tay

  • 16 years ago

    by JustKristina

    Great poem, and wonderful way to throw a twist in there. It makes the reader start to wonder, and lets them use their own imagination. You did a fantabulous *haha my new word!* on this.. keep i tup! :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    That..... was beautiful! The imagery was amazing, and the end was such a turn of events. Great title for this poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Interesting poem, I love the ending, whole piece is original and you expressed emotions on a very nice way.
    Keep writing.

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    Dang and u liked my poem that hit hard nicely buetifully done 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Excellent... absolutely loved loved loved the ending!... kudos on this one.

    keep it up.

    5/5

  • Wow, this poem absolutely left me breathless. It has so much feeling in it. The flow fit just right. It was such an amazing piece. Good job!

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Beautiful use of imagery here hun. The poem was short sweet simple and to the point which made it enjoyable to read. The ending was unexpected but fit the poem well. Again a great use of rhyme. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    First, I did ask for no love poems, but I am glad I decided to read this anyway. At first I though, oh now that another cliche love poem. This did surprise me though. For one, you used word choices I have not see yet or often such as lithe and silhouette. You kept it simple instead of dragging it out and on with too many words. YOu kept up a decent flow and then the best part. You had a surprise ending in which it all was a lie from a wishing girl's point of view without giving it away early on as most people would.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    The flow was flawless and this was a beautifully written piece. I really like it. It's short and simple but so full of passion. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    I really like this one. The twist at the end was brilliant! The flow was great, the word choice couldn't have been better, and the concept was clever. Great write! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    Wow talk about surprising twist! Beautiful, sad poem. I loved it. It started off strong and finished off powerful. The words chosen were beautiful and elegant and the whole poem was a wonderful piece. This one was my favorite of yours I've read so far. 5/5