Every Time

by KJ   Jan 17, 2008


Every time we touch my heart skips a beat
Every time we kiss i cant help but to feel weak
Every time we touch I suddenly feel butterflies
Every time you say "Love You" i feel so alive
Every time I see you I cant keep my composure
Every time we're apart I yearn to be closer
Every time we fight I feel nothing but pain
Every time you're gone my sunshine turns into rain
Every time I see you with her I cant help but to cry
Because every time I long for it to be You And I...

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  • 16 years ago

    by Laurenf7

    This is great =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Ken

    Short................short and sweet that is lol.

  • 17 years ago

    by always in my heart

    Thats amazing.
    I love it
    So much meaning.
    And I feel It.

  • 17 years ago

    by jane

    Awwwww i just adroe this

  • 17 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    Oooooooh. its so simple and has TONS of potential. First off, capitalize "I". It draws the eye instantly to an error and takes away from the greatness. But heres my real

    advice:
    All the lines start with "everytime" which has a real nice poetic affeect. HOWEVER, with the last like not starting with "every time is kinda interrupts the flow. and you basically have couplets due to the aabb rhyme scheme. so i would add another line. So heres my suggestion. Add another line after "Every time I see you with her I cant help but to cry" that rhymes with "cry". Then make a break after it before "Because every time I long for it to be You And I...". That will add a designated pause and have a great poetic affect. =D

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