by Brittany C Jan 18, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
Wanting to cry |
by Blackstar
Really liked to read this. |
Great write i suppose that the only reason why you skipped lines was to emphasize that it was lonely piece and i like that great work- |
by firexdancer
I thought it was pretty good, it didn't flow very well but the poem made a strong impact on the reader. The only mistake I noticed was that "site" is actually spelled "sit". |
This is a really good poem. I really liked the words you chose to describe it. Although, maybe you whould not skip the lones in the stanzas. It's good though. Great job!! 5/5 |