Depression/Dark contest

This contest is for depressed and or dark poetry only, It can be about anything but must follow the RULES

*_* RULES *_*
1. Must be YOUR work, cannot use other peoples work and yes I will check around for things that seem a little too similar so please try to be original a limit of ONE poem per person please, More than one poem will result in disqualification of both poems.

2. Can contain profainity and such but do not overdo it, I shouldn't have to elaborate on this but I will, 5 profain words is the limit on any poem any length

3. Poems can be any length but the more they drag the more points u get deducted

4. Poetry contest ends on March 5th, Yes only a 4 day contest, but winners will get a prize

5.Poems are all rated out of 10 instead of 5. On March 7th, two days after the contest ends, if you would like to know your score e-mail me at mia.chan.sakura@hotmail.com if I haven't already sent you a message with your score.

6. DO NOT GRADE OTHERS WORK, you may private message them about it but do not fill up the forum with needless encouragement. I realize you would like your friends to do well but you can tell them that in private messages and such. Anyone who encourages another will be immediatly disqualified and a warning given to those who were encouraged to either get it to stop or they will be disqualified to.

7. The one thing other than your poetry and name that is allowed is a dedication. I don't care who to but I am also not the only one judging. Me and 2 of my friends will all be judging the poetry so as to make this as fair of a contest as is possible. The poetry can be aimed at anyone including us, however this is a contest so try to show some sportsmanship like qualities when posting. Thank you
** PRIZES **
1st place:
A place on my favorites list, garanteed 10 comments from me (even if you have less than ten poems) and your user site will be posted on several websites, added votes for every poem and Dedicated poetry to you monthly

2nd place:
Garanteed 5 comments from me (even if you have less than five poems) and your user site will be posted on one of my sites

3rd place:
Two garanteed Comment and a imaginary pat on the back

All other participants:
One garanteed Comment from me.

So what are you waiting for Get a Writing.

Breaking Up
by Tabitha

The night was weary, the rain came down,
lets go for a walk he said with a frown.
the whole night through, he had nothing to say, as if there were something to stand in the way.
suddenly he said it with a blur, my parents said break up with her.
I'm sorry he said, i cant pretend, my parents said our love must end.
the tears began to roll down his face and then he stopped and took her into his embrace.
she took his ring and wrote something down. thats when she noticed his face was a frown.
she opened her purse and dropped it inside, she said nothing else just sat there and cried.
all of a sudden the car wouldn't start
she looked at him saying you've broken my heart.
he opened the his window and looked passed the rain, thats when he noticed the light of the train.
he grabbed her hand and jumped outside, oh what a night to take a ride.
she let go his hand and ran in a fit, got back in the car then the train hit.
there was a scream, then a crash, but just one could hear, then he looked around there were people coming.
the ambulance sounded like the whimper of her cry, then they said sorry son, she died.
they opened her purse, brought it to him, the night was dark, the flash light so dim.
he heard someone say read it to the crowd, he opened it up and read it out loud.
Heres what it said:
I'm sorry to here you don't love me no more, i know things can never be as before.
you know your parents aren't being fair, to break up to people who really care.
if i should die before you do just remember darling, i love you!
and if I'm in heaven, ill look down from the sky and tell everyone hey thats my guy.
and if i should die before you do no matter what ill always be true.
i guess theres nothing i can say or do but i still love, may god bless you.
as tears began to roll down his eyes, he said a prayer to the sky.
he blamed himself for what she had done, he remembered her saying you are the only one.
if he hadn't broke up, shed still be wearing his ring and wouldn't have went back for such a silly thing.
he sat there thinking how she put his ring in her purse, his dreamed switched from her to a big black nurse.
he raised his head high and said a prayer up above, take care of her lord.

Silent memories
by Tabby

(to those memories people keep silent we all have them)

Forgetting all those silent memories
That haunt the soul and mind
That corrupt the happy thoughts
Which are usually so hard to find

Trying to keep them silent
Hoping they'll get lost
But sometimes their stronger
And happiness is all it costs

For memories you don't want
Such sacrifice you pay
To not feel that painful memory
You just want to go away

It seeps into your life unannounced
Like some kind of disease
As it eats away the happiness
That once used to ease

all the pain you have suffered
And the darkness that you see
all the loss of your happiness
is all caused by those silent memories

The Vampire's Kiss
by Alyson

Silently walking
Trying not to be heard
No ones in sight
No ones uttering a word

Suddenly theres a pressence
Stalking me from behind
Coming ever closer
Thinking that I'm still blind

They come up behind me
Hold me so I can't move
Death is in the air
Now I realize what I will lose

The sharp teeth peirce the flesh
Creating a fountion of blood
That flows into their mouth
Like a welcome flood

My body stiffens
I can't breath
I start to fall
While they turn and leave

I cry out for help
But they walk away
Because of my blood
They will live another day

I started to think
Of everything that I would miss
Because I would never see them
I had been given the Vampire's Kiss

One Mistake

You thought you had it all,
Had your life all planned out.
Everything was going exactly perfect.
Thought you were doing everything right

But one day, you realize,
You really screwed up somehow.
Your perfect plan had a flaw.
Now what do you do?
You didn't have a second plan.

You had to tell your boyfriend.
Find a way to tell your parents.
Make doctors appointments.
All so much to do because,
Of one little mistake

You hadn't planned a baby,
Especially at the age of 18.
You had plans to go to college.
Then raise a family.
Your parents are going to be upset.

What are you going to do?
How can you afford this?
Will he still love you?
All this because one mistake!

Darkness Has Become Me
by West

A ritual unfolds within these veins.
My blood does boil, my heart is a race.
All memory is reset to not cry.
Upon this night the soul within does die.

Falling to the ground.
My skin is now white.
Whiter than the snow upon the moons light.
My blood goes black as the night screams in fear.
For the end is here, the end is here.

I have such power; no way can I be stopped.
Flying through the air upon the wind.
Evil is not what I am.
Just one of darkness’s original sins.

With this gift I do here embrace.
I will live forever without a single care.
Doing as I please every night.
Then sleeping by day.
I must hide from the light.

Vapour Beneath The Clouds

We are but vapour beneath the clouds
Translucent passion under the horizon
Seduced by the simple things
Our desire to be dreamers
Wakes us up to real life

The world without people
To burden it with our petty worries
Would be joyous and true
Yet it takes our weight with grace
Knowing we’ll soon leave
Let nature rest in peace

When we stop colouring our world
We’ll truly understand it
Let the old man teach the young
Let our earth teach us how to live

If I were to kill the demon would it not still be murder?
If I were to seduce the temptress, rape?

If I were the last puff of vapour beneath the clouds
Would the passion still be there?
Would my heart beat twice as fast in yearning?
Or would I lose the power in despair?

the untold lies.....

I would never forgive myself..
even i am dropped in hell
never knowing how u feel.....
with a deep blue ill.........

on that short christmas eve.....
when you suddenly leave
a pair of teary eyes.......
as i know the untold lies.....

thus, your gentle smile.....
has turned into incomprehensible file.....
and every single of your touch
has become a deep ingrained cut....

what a fool i am......
full of critics and damn.....
your life is full of uncertainty
but i keep nagging a pity

again and again...
i expect you to understand..
with a sound of offense
without knowing where you stand.....

even so, you always deny.....
to say that important line
with a soft white lie...
or a saying i'm fine........

now, bombard me with your protests..
but please do not give me such a test..
please don't you ever leave me.....
cause you mean the world to me...

AN EMPIRE OF DARKNESS
***********************
LIFE NOW HAS FADED AWAY
IT'S WEAK LIGHT DEPLETED FROM MY VEIN
IT'S BEAUTY AND QUIETNESS NOW BECAME A SIN
AND MY DREAM OF DEATH WAS REBORN AGAIN
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MANY DIRECTIONS IN FRONT OF MY EYES
,BUT NO ONE I CAN CHOOSE
NOTHING I CAN SEE CLEARLY AND NOTHING IS THERE TO LOSE
INSTEAD OF LIFE I SEE DEATH AND SADNESS
AS IF ALL OF MY LIFE I WAS LIVING IN DARKNESS
AN EMPIRE ,.. YES, AVERY BIG WORLD OF MADNESS
THAT TURNED ALL MY LIFE INTO SOMETHING HOPELESS
************************************
I BEGAN TO SEE HOW THE SIN BECAME A VIRTUE
BUT DON'T WORRY MY DEAR I AIN'T GONNA HURT YOU
I'LL JUST LEAVE YOU WHERE THE LIGHT CAN BE
AND I SHALL DEPART AGAIN TO REVEAL MY DESTINY
*************************************
THE DESTINY THAT WAS FORCED UPON MY EYES
SO FULL OF PAIN , SO FULL OF SACRIFICE
AS IF I WAS LEADING THE WORLD TO IT'S DEMISE
************************************
NOW THE LIGHT RETURNED TO US AGAIN
TO REVEAL THE DARKNESS AND PURE THE SIN
BUT A GOOD LOOK AT THE END AND YOU CAN SEE INDEED
HATE AND BETRAYAL WERE BORN FROM A DARK SEED
**************************************
NOW THE LIGHT ISN'T PURE AT ALL
AND I JUST CAN'T RUN AND HIDE BEHIND THAT WALL
THE DARKNESS NOW IS MUCH BETTER FOR ME
AN EMPIRE OF DARKNESS WHERE I'M BLIND , I CAN'T EVEN SEE..!
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Devil's whore

The sun sets on you body
The fog engulfed it ever slowly
You lay motionless on the ground
I couldn't speak, nor make a sound
The words were there but wouldn't come out
I knew what I had to do I had to shout
To every person in this empty world
To every boy and every girl
I need to be forgiven
For I this life I have taken
It wasn't mine to have stolen so bluntly
Now you lay a deep puddle bloody
"Though you did not know of which I was prepared to do
Neither I nor had such a clue"
Was all I could get out
Before I couldn't even move my mouth
I just kissed your cold dead hand
And realized that you were no longer a man
Just a corpse and nothing more
Now sentenced to be forever the devil's whore

My Reflection

I see her there, staring back at me,
hiding secrets the world will never know.
Her mouth will never confess a thing,
and her eyes will cease to be the windows to her soul.

Her body won't tell the story of her bruises.
No one will ever see the scars on her heart.
The world will never hear the truth behind the lies.
It will go with her when from this Earth she'll one day part.

So she will keep up the pretence and the fake smiles,
Knowing that, like with all things, the show must go on.
For like me she is just a small actor in this great master play,
and when I look in the mirror I see her, my reflection.

Rain's Illusion

Rain pours down
Soaking into my skin
Healing my wounds
And the pain within

Thunder's in the distance
Along with flashing light
I don't care anymore
I'm trying with all my might

Sinking into mud
Hidden from the road
Trying to find a way out
Before I simply explode

Pain is building up,
Fighting is getting worse
Hurting more than ever
Trapped by life's curse

Blinded by tears,
Shaking from confusion
Everything I knew
Was just another illusion

the city of a darkened mind

Through the cold iron gates,
So threatening and high,
Walls built all around,
Built up to the sky,

Build a city of darkness,
Where the foundations run deep,
Watch the crimson rivers,
As though the walls they seep,

The ground is unstable,
The walls closing in,
The sun disappearing,
The dark night will begin,

The city is empty,
Though people are about,
Outside of the walls,
People scream and shout,

Those inside call back,
But heard they are not,
And slowly over time,
Their existence is forgot,

The crimson rivers swell,
The lights flicker and die,
The buildings start to tumble,
We start to wonder why,

The city starts to fall,
Those within can't get out,
We claw at the walls,
Start to scream and shout,

Send messages to those outside,
Never knowing if they will be found,
Try in vain to escape,
But to this place we are forever bound,

The buildings all turn black,
Against a blood red sky,
They take on a jagged form,
We know the city is soon to die,

Try our best to save it,
The save it from its end,
But there is nothing we can do,
It is too damaged for us to mend,

Black rain begins to fall,
Covering the land in a poisonous layer,
Slowly the city starts to burn,
We are left with no hope nor prayer,

And so the city begins to fade,
Never knowing its true worth,
Built upon doomed foundations,
Doomed ever since its birth.

Miss You*
by PreciousIllusions

I know it's cliche to say this
And there's no way to say it without it
sounding like some cheesy pick-me-up line
But I've been missing you again lately

I know I shouldn't, I have no reason
Missing something that never happened
We're better off living separated
Never thinking of each other again

But you and I both know how weak I am
It was my weakness that brought us to an end
But I can't help missing you, missing every you
I miss your heart, the way you care
I miss your dreams and your hopeless hair

I miss your canned laughter, toothy grin
I miss the fur upon your chin
I miss you so much more than you'll ever see
I even miss the way you always ignored me

I miss your teasing and vain grace
I miss your open palm and bruises on her face
I miss drunken violence, the bitter atheist
Your suicidal fear of death, I miss your arrogance

I miss the days you wanted to know me
I miss our tragicomic romance
But mostly I'm just missing you
Because I missed my chance

I miss you like a bad dream
It's all that I have left
A mirage coated fantasy
I miss being your friend

You can't miss something that you never had
I never wanted it to be this way
I never wanted it to be this way

It reminds me too much of you
by "-"ciñdy"-"

It rained throughout the night
The sound of thunder, the feeling of fright
It rained once again
It reminds of all those pain
I'll never forget about it, never forget about you
This is what I would do
If I were you, I'll make everything come true
But here's the thing I'm not you
If I was, I won't break any hearts
Nor tear it apart I won't do that, all I want Is a good start
It rained again Memories just kept flooding my mind
I can't help myself by asking so many questions but so little time
Can't do anything about it, cause it kept repeating
Why can't I just stop this feeling?
It's tearing my heart and upsetting my brain
Why can't I say It's alright once again
It rained again I'm feeling cold
I lost the most precious person, more precious then gold
I can't stop this from happening
Cause I've got a strange feeling that is tearing us apart
I can't hold on anymore, I'm falling from head to heart
I can't help but sit there all broken up inside
Whenever I need you there, you aren't by my side
I couldn't help but look out the window
I stared hard at the stupid rain
It reminds me too much of the things I know
It all started out fine
But it always has a sad ending no wonder why?
I can't believe it started out good but turns out dry

In the Balance of life and death

I'm putting back the pieces
Of this messed up life of mine
But this puzzle is impossible
And it's my life on the line

The pain, I've tried everything
Just to make it go away
But it doesn't make it better
Because this pain is here to stay

Behind this face shows
A girl with hidden resent,
But she puts up this big show
Her real self she can't present...

The scars they run deep
I can't seem to hide it
It's like they all see thru me
One thing they won't admit

People thinks I'm a fake
That I pretend to be sad
I don't want their sympathy
But it's not like they feel bad

I'm just a girl in a crazy world
And I'm just trying to make it
But right now I'm stumbling
I think it's time to quit...

It feels like I'm running in circles
Nothing is ever gonna change
Thats the part thats killing me
But even my life has it range.

It feels like I'm watching a movie
Of this life of mine
I see myself in pain
But everyone else is fine

They look right past me
Like I'm not even there
I guess I shouldn't say that
It's not like they care.

I can't go on like this forever
With this feeling of hurt and regret
There is a chance it will get better
But there are some things I won't forget

Unsure if I should pull the plug
While I am standing here
Looking at my own reflection
I see my own death is near

--emotionless19.*

"Just A Toy"

I said i love you,
and you said it back,
but did you mean it,
or was it a wise crack?..

you claimed to love me,
as i love you,
you said you did.
but if only i knew..

you never loved me,
and you never would.
but i couldn't have known,
i would've if i could..

i honestly love you,
many times this was said.
and i will continue to love you,
until i am dead.

but still you hurt me,
you yanked my heart,
and then you ran,
like a flying dart..

i was just a toy,
to pass the time.
but when i found out,
i still pardoned your crime..

but yet again you hurt me,
i wont let you have your fun,
I'm sick of this pain,
its over, we're done..

thus my love's gone,
i actually cared.
to think you'd hurt me,
i never dared..

i must give in,
nothing to hold me up.
let the pain end,
with the pills in this cup..

~Chris Engle

Alright The contest is over as of now ...

Results:
These results are only from me, what I gave you, The end results what is given to people as prizes are results of everyone's comments sent to me and what my group gave as scores,

Day 1

Breaking Up by Tabitha got a 9

Silent Memories by Tabby got a 7

The Vampire's Kiss by Allison got a 9.9

One Mistake by Lexie got a 9

Darkness has become me by West got a 8

Vapour Beneath the Clouds by Sondos got a 6

The Untold Lies by Yuniardi got a 10 (won first day prize of and extra comment)

Day 2

An empire of darkness by Ramy Medhat got a 9.2

Devil's Whore by Braeden Monks gota 9

My Reflection by Cuddles got a 8.5

Rain's Illusion by JL got a 9.5

A untitled poem that was by KRISTEN got a 10
(winner of day 2 prize of an extra comment)

Silent Mime by Shadow Rain {Ruby} got a 9.2

The city of a darkened mind by master of shadow got a 9.6

Miss You by Precious Illusions got a 8.5

It reminds me to much of you by "-" cindy "-" got a 5

Day 3

In the Balance of life and death by emotionless19 got a 7

Just a toy by Chris Engle got a 9.7 (won the third day prize of plus one comment

p.s. I realize I gave many people tens but again there were more people rating you all so the final prizes came out so:

~.~ FIRST PLACE ~.~
Tabitha of Breaking up
GREAT JOB

~.~SECOND PLACE ~.~
Chris Engle of Just a toy
Wonderful

~.~THIRD PLACE~.~
Alyson of The Vampire's Kiss
Beautiful

~.~ EvErYoNe ElSe ~.~
Great job and I'll be sure to get right on commenting good luck for future poems and thanks for your submissions They are all beautiful.

Wow, thank you soo much! To be honest i really didnt think id place.. hehe. well i guess im better than i thought, thanks again everyone! i look forward to what you have to say about my works..

~Chris Engle

Thanks so much. I never thought that I would place. I'm so happy that I don't care if its third, I'm just glad that I placed.

not to complain or anything.. but im just curious what the ETA on the rewards is?

~chris

wow.. not to complain.. but its been like a week since this was over, and no rewards... not that its anything major, i was just wondering if i was forgotten..

~chris engle

I haven't seen anything either. I don't care though. I enter contests so that people will read my work.

so much for this competition.. no reward.. oh well. still very happy i placed..

~chris engle