A Saved Soul

by LitxUpxWithxLife   Apr 12, 2008


Dark father, bless me I've sinned a few times.
I've stole more than just nickels and dimes.
I've stolen a love that was pure and just.
Turned their love into ashes and dust.
It took no effort and one small kiss.
Then I took advantage of this little miss
She thought I loved her, but it was all a lie.
Now that she sees the truth she wishes to die.
It was all my fault, I just wanted to feel love for a night.
But now her body lies crumpled from her jump at that height.
She died, and it was all my fault.
I prayed to God and he brought life to a halt.
I told him what happened and asked him to take me instead.
Take me away and bring back their souls from the dead.
Let them take my place in life, and me their's in death.
Give them the beat in my heart and the air in my breath.
He smiled a minute and he granted my wish.
I prepared for Hell, but my soul he did fish,
I asked why to hell I was not bound.
He told me, "My child, your soul we have found".

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  • 10 years ago

    by Sora Lynn

    Wow this poem was deep and absolutely beautiful. the flow was fantastic and the different emotions expressed made the poem even better.

    I told him what happened and asked him to take me instead.
    Take me away and bring back their souls from the dead.
    Let them take my place in life, and me their's in death.
    Give them the beat in my heart and the air in my breath.

    i would have to say, those were my favorite lines. especially the last line. very lovely, very heartfelt. this was a very unique poem and i loved it! never quit writing. job well done. 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 10 years ago

    by BurriedFaceDown

    This poem has you thinking one way in the begining then another in the middle...in a good way though

    i love how you seem to just want to take crupt all then it turns out you hate yourself and wish for their life back and then have yours end...oh I love it

  • 10 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Omg i loved this it was so great and eye catching...i think its the best yet!!!!((5))