Heavens Carnage

Beautifully written! very good job

This piece, for me, wasn't as good as your other piece that I've read, but let's be honest, you do demand a high standard, so I wouldn't worry too much, lol.

Anyway, I just think that the reason this wasn't as good as you’re others, was that it lacked power. The words in this piece didn't exude strength. You're flow was perfect, as ever, and it was a good length.

Brad

I would tell you which part i liked best but i love the entire thing. when i think i finally have it i read another part then get confused again. never ever ever ever ever stop doing what you do. your going places with these poems. 100/5 !! ~KM~

Quite impressing poem. Only thing that bothered me is rhyme pain-vein, because I think that it isn't original as rest of rhymes are. Anyway, you managed to create deep, vivid atmosphere through this poem. It is very interesting and it shows your talent. I honestly enjoyed. I like your topic, and the way you described your emotions is very detail and convincing. Simply remarkable job, very unique.

"Forever running from shadows
Consumed by a blanket of lies
Grey orbs remain so empty
Still scanning the lifless skies"
lifless=lifeless. you forgot the extra e.
I can totally relate to this particular stanza. It is like this was written about me.

"Smearing the tainted darkness
Digging deeper every time
Each word thrown onto paper
Crying this blood soaked rhyme"
This also relates to me very well.
I think that is my favorite stanza, but not by much.

I find nothing wrong with your rhymes, your word choice, or your flow. The picture sketched in my head moved along flawlessly. The emotions in this were strong. It was a good poem. I can relate, which makes it better.
5/5

Lexie