You start out so strong and powerful here. The emotion of sadness is so well placed. Yhe simple room where your unhappiness blooms I love the build up to the rest of the poem.
Second- I actually love the repeated lines of in this room because it works so well here with the feeling. The way you describe your sadness is great. Dark fills your mind and surrounds you.
Third- the metaphor as the room as the person is great. Saying they have always been there for you! Youhave always suffered all your life and the room is your sancutary
Fourth- the story is sad and the depression is truly is starting to take over you. Being hard to breathe and your self esteem is low excellent.
Fifth- I love how you describe the room is your liar and your hurt. I love it because this is where it starts getting good.
Sixth/seventh. This stanza is chilling and beautiful written for sure. You describe the room as haunting. The room could be a ghost! My room hears my screams that is so well written as you are saying that no one can hear your scream and you are alone.
8/9/ending- every word you describe this room as is fantastic because it is every bad memory but yet your savior. You are alone but you are not. You are so unique as a writer and this poem proves it. I didnt see any flaws and I love rhyming as is changes. 5
I totally get this poem!! When we go through things, have pain, feel depressed, are angry, or when we are crying uncontrollably, no one sees that, they only see what we want them to. But when we go back to the privacy of our homes, the walls in our room see EVERYTHING! And this poem is completely true. I loved how you made a poem out of this! Great job! 5/5 :)