Oh wow, you really incorporated the quote quite nicely, more so towards the end but I loved this because it holds a lot of more power there than anywhere else in the poem.
You know, there's not much to critique here, it's something we can all relate to. It seems as though songs that were dedicated to us by someone who used to mean something to us creep up all the time reminding us of who they were and now realizing how much of a liar they were and how much sadness they bring to us.
This is quite perfect. It's simple. I loved it! A unique way of expressing these thoughts. :)
Well, Nana, I was talking to my physcriatrist person and they told me I should stay away from people like you who have this amazing talent at writing from their heart and bringing phrases to life! It makes me JEALOUS! :P Now that you know where I am coming from, Nana, you have completely made a beautiful yet sad piece that I think is wonderful. The flow was really good as was the structure of the poem. Your poem had a steady beat that went from stanza to stanza keeping pace with your flow.
You were as gentle as a dove, alas
never held the wisdom of a real
This had to be my favorite part as I was wondering how you would incorporate the saying into the poem and then I read the end finally and am blown away to see you have a killer of an ending. You placed your emotions well in this poem and I could feel them throughout the poem with a intensity that only you can deliver.
All in all, your skills are not diminishing whatsoever and you seem to be able to increase your poetic skills with each poem that you write and I look forward to read your next poem and see what you have for me. Just keep writing this wonderful pieces! Great job and keep writing! :]