For everything you give me.

by Jenni   Feb 14, 2012


I'm afraid that I can't
write love poems,
at least not those
that describe the feelings
you stir up in me

because I believe,
that one has to
experience it, so that
they may understand.

I will try to illustrate
them with metaphors
and images, but
only to thank you.

Sometimes
I searched for my shadow,
the dark part of me,
the constant companion,
but the light was missing
to even recognize it.

By now I couldn't
count myself luckier
because I didn't only
discover my shadow,
but rather the light,
that protects and guides me.

However,
that was not the only way
you enriched me.

One could almost say,
that if I was a tree,
then you gave me wisdom
and halt like roots,
but most important

you nourish me
with your tender
but strong love.

I hope it will stay like this.

Thank you for being who you are!

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  • 12 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    So gracefully you have described your feelings without going overboard with colorful language ... I loved the simplicity of the poem and that's how love is. .. simple and beautiful.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jad

    I knew you were being too modest. I really enjoyed this piece and I can feel the emotions you put into this piece seeping from line to line. You have a overall love that you are pouring out and also a sense of gratitude for this person and everything that they have helped you with. The poem had a good flow though I think you carried the poem out a little longer than was needed but that could just be me. You also had some good metaphors in the poem and also some nice imagery, which always makes a poem really nice and helps it to flow better.

    "Sometimes
    I searched for my shadow,
    the dark part of me,
    the constant companion,
    but the light was missing
    to even recognize it."
    ^^^
    I really enjoyed this stanza as I can see someone looking for this darkness only to realize that they don't even have the necessary equipment to find it and they are left with nothing because of how someone makes them feel. The stanza also seemed to be the strongest for me and I really enjoyed reading it.

    In all, you did a good job and I really liked the message of the poem. This poem can be true for so many people and I am sure there are people who can relate to this. We all find someone who is just always themselves and in doing that they are a blessing to us. Like I said I just really like the message and I think you have a great talent and I'm glad to see you using it. I hope you continue to write and advance your skill. Great job and keep writing!

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Shadows

    Beautiful write

  • 12 years ago

    by neo

    Well written.

  • 12 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Jenni-

    This piece gave me shivers....such an elegant and heartfelt piece.... true feelings are powerful... and this piece is just beautiful ~