Comments : Transparent Lips

  • 5 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Liz! I am beyond glad you posted this. I love your creativity, and this piece is totally amazing. The transition in the end was astonishing. Definitely going to my favorites. Great job! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    Oh Liz! This is really creative! And yeah, sex clears your mind enough to see straight! Lmao. I love this!

  • 5 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Haha!

    This should be nominated next week! Hahahaha. :P

  • 5 years ago

    by Lioness

    Lol thanks guys. I hope it's easy to read.

    LOL @ Britt, have I made you excited this time lol

  • 5 years ago

    by Britt

    Tee hee! Gutter mind, party of me!

    It was super easy to read. I didn't struggle throughout the whole thing! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by ronel mccarthy

    Creates special effects with ur technique.........great as always

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    As I said in the club, I didn't have problems reading it fast, I only stopped at two words...

    You are so creative, Liz <3

    That was another awesome, original write from you!

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I had read this in the club and didn't have a chance to comment on it then. I'm so glad you posted it because it is SO creative. Your experiment turned out fantastic! :)

  • 5 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    You no what that is outstanding so creative
    This is such a short piece but the words at the end made this poem seriously if it would of been more complicated longer or not had the last stanza I don't think it would of worked everything you did was perfect you made it so we could understand just enough it's sooo inspirational one of the best I've read and it's a nomination and added to my favourites

    Amazing

  • 5 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Isnt that so weird how we can do that? I didnt struggle one bit.

    What I loved though is the actual poem!! The fact that you made jumbled words an analogy to describe your life being unclear....so so creative! I love this

  • 5 years ago

    by Karla

    ::: ((
    *: (=' :') :*
    -.. (,('')('')-.-`»Liz, your poem reminded me of a game we used to play here. I simply loved it because I felt as if I was young again. Thanks my friend.

  • 5 years ago

    by DirtRoadGirl

    I loved this alot :)

  • 5 years ago

    by mnemosyne

    This is a great piece! I was totally nerding the first time I read the paragraph you posted, and learned (more in depth) about how our eyes and brain process language, and written word. I adore experimenting with the alphabet, so I especially appreciate this :)

    The simple transition back to clarity at the end was lovely.

  • 5 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    A creative example of "dysgraphia" (=jumbled wordings), more specifically letter-position dysgraphia variant (i.e not involving substitutions, additions, and omissions, but only mis-positioning of letters), often seen in children/some adults with or without dyslexia or other learning difficulties, and rarely after injuries to the angular cortex of the brain (a piece of brain that is part of the language decoding area, such as in an interesting condition called Gerstmann's syndrome).

    Dysgraphia (easy to understand quote from Wikipedia) is really a transcription disability, meaning that is a writing disorder associated with impaired handwriting, orthographic coding (orthography, the storing process of written words and processing the letters in those words), and finger sequencing (the movement of muscles required to write). It often overlaps with other learning disabilities such as speech impairment, attention deficit disorder, or developmental coordination disorder.

    Very nice and educational piece for those who will work with children with special needs (dyslexia/dysgraphia) in schools and special situations. Good job Liz.

    (Could not resist breaking my own promise of <48 hrs ago, haha!)

    Edit: Forgot to compliment you for the beautiful emotions presented here from a woman's point of view towards her man, and the support she gets from being in total love.

  • 5 years ago

    by Ruby Red Memories

    This made me smile. I love the fact you gave this ago and I think it is very interesting.
    Anyway enough about the way the poem was written and more about what poem was actually saying - I found this piece to have alot of emotion inside it and I like how you kept things light yet really impacted on the reader.

    A fantastic piece that is loveable and puts a smile on the readers face

    5/5

  • 5 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I read this a few days ago but never commented due to being at work and I completely forgot to comment when I got home...

    But I love the idea behind this and I am guessing it took some time to write because of making sure the words were written correctly and all...

    I read this quite easily and it is very strange how we do this,

    I think you expertly pulled off what is a tricky concept.

    Love always...

  • 5 years ago

    by Decayed

    Congratssssss!

  • 5 years ago

    by L

    Felicidades!! (congrats!)

  • 5 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    What a cool idea to write on, and the meaning in this poem too was beautiful....losing yourself when you are with him, him bringing you into another world and how you can't always make sense of it. Congratulations Liz! I smiled when reading this, it was a thrilling concept when you explained it at the beginning and you expressed so much when I read it.

    Congrats and take care :]

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Congratulations Liz!! You are a creative and lovely writer! this poem was awesome!!