Great job Meme for winning the challenge and writing this lovely piece.
Just from the title, I knew this was going to be a powerful piece and it was fairly obvious you were going to win after I read it in the club. ;)
As already stated, it's so unique and I'm simply in love with how you end your poems. It seems like you keep building up your poems in each line with emotions and imagery and awesome ideas. And when I think there's nothing left, you just leave the reader speechless with your ending.
Congrats again. And keep it up! :)
5 years ago
"I now have to drag
my cold body that
compliments the chill
I am feeling inside,"
I think "compliments" should be "complements" here..the way I've been reading it lol. I suppose it could work both ways, but with the "e" it's more of a "paired together" type thing. I hope I make sense... lol
That being said, that was my favorite part. I felt the pain and loneliness and loved the imagery you have. You connected everyday things that we take for granted as those that are taken away from you to feel that void. This was really a beautiful poem :)
The analogy here, and how it was used throughout this whole piece, I just fell completely in love with this....and to use homeless to describe your heart, how freaking creative. Thats what blew me away, was when I read your prompt, first thing that comes to mind is a homeless person. But no, not you, you step it up a notch and dig deep...and its outstanding meme, really is :) Good job baby girl!