This young and talented author has created a poem that truly made my mouth drop to the floor!
Her impeccable word display was beautiful and flow through out this entire piece!
There is nothing more frustrating and dark as the mind tricks that are played in our own minds, whether it be depression or an illness, that clock "tick tocks" louder than a freight train.
Kakera has described that moment well within this poem.
Her ending says it all... It touched me personally because I have felt many times in my life the very same way.
She has a gift to mix and match her words so that the reader can feel and visualize each stanza. This is truly a brilliant poem!!
4 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
I have read very few poems in a long time that made my jaw drop and this is one. Again I saw no technical flaws. But this poem is magnificent in it's wording. You blew my mind... and that ending. But will get to that. Omg the first two stanzas alone were enough to pull the reader in but your wording is so profound here. I think only one noise can drive us insane. I think here though it is your own thoughts that are doing that very think. When you think about one thing for so long you grow crazy, just like sitting in silence. I loved the inner monologue feeling to this. You build "castles" around your mind to keep it safe but you need someone to save you from yourself. In the middle of the poem I loved the imagery of the cigerette. Brilliant there. I also like the comparison of flame and madness. Though the flame is real, the madness of your mind or flame is much worse. The ending though is perfect. I think what you are saying is that though the problems in your mind are nothing compared to the world. You are just one spec. Brilliant write from a brilliant mind.