You've torn me here
You've torn me there
Between you all
You've torn me bare.
I've nothing left to give you now
I must back-track
And lose this care.
If I do not
I will not be
The person you need me to be.
I don't know how I missed this one. I'm glad I found it now. Dynamic truthful emotion straight from the heart. Poetry is nice to read when it is fluffy and as Ben eloquently said polished but equally there is something equally compelling about raw emotion portrayed in a poem and this has that quality. I hope the people have taken this on board xx
Whilst I agree with Em to an extent, I will say that this poem makes up for whatever it may be missing from a technical point (compared to your other work) with a raw kind of honesty that isn't seen enough in any art. I've said before, but too often, work is over polished and over produced to give it a superficial gloss. The problem is, by doing this, it loses its genuineness and can come off as contrived.
As far as the content is concerned...well, you and I have talked enough about this sort of thing for you to know I am in entire agreement with it. Not always so easy to distance ourselves, though, is it?
Hi, I'll have to admit because I'm an honest person (and please don't be upset) but in my opinion this isn't your best work butI love the message you sent out because if you hadn't been hurt etc etc then things would obviously be smelling of roses but you wouldn't be this lovely woman with a fantastic talent which I know sucks but it's made you the person you are today being hurt like many of us on the site and though I don't think it's your best (and I think it's probably because is different to your other works) I still think its really well done and resonates with me and many people on the site.