A phoenix from the flames (haiku)

by Mr. Darcy   Mar 21, 2018


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cascading seeds spin
through the cooling air, resting
on last years scorched earth

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© 2018 - Mr. Darcy

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  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael, this is sublime. Oh to have this on the front page next week and have short forms recognised for how wonderful they can be.

    All the best as ever

  • 6 years ago

    by Brenda

    Michael! Hello! It's so nice to see you on the boards and with such a lovely haiku to boot. Hugs to you!

  • 6 years ago

    by Jamie

    Nominated. This is an excellent Haiku!

  • 6 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Mr D firstly glad to see you back again,joining in the challenge Rania set and most importantly (to me anyway) interacting.
    Title - This is interesting and makes me think that you are trying to say the phoenix is being reborn again (what they're most known for) from hell ‘the flames’ but like any of you're works I doubt it is that simple for the likes of me anyway haha
    1 and 2 - seeds spin possibly out of control and in large amounts ‘cascading’ but why, are they rejoicing are they in cahoots with the phoenix? I'm not so sure but the image is beautiful and intriguing. The second line is a breath of fresh air quite literally.
    3 - This is a fantastic and mysterious ending because it made me wonder why the seeds are landing on previously ‘scorched earth’ when they could clearly land on the scorched earth we've made today then a thought crossed my mind maybe these seeds are trying to help make a difference to today's earth as the wools quite clearly been pulled over our eyes. Hmm much room for thought.
    Take care
    Em. X

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