omg-if ur talking about meth i know what ur talking about 4real! That stuff has had me for a little over year. but i've been clean 7 days today! Longest time ever except in rehab but i couldn't have gotten it if i wanted it there. im trying to shake the habit tho. if i don't it'll kill me.
This was a really good peom. it was so simple yet it had so much meaning. i liked it alot.Keep it up! ***Leah
First off your poem was great and that really means allot cause i know of someone who lost their kid because os sdeedin. and second thanks for the comment please keep reading my poems your comment means allot to me.
What a strong message. Dont speed! *speeds* Again I find it amusing! Are all your poems this amusing? I guess Id have to read them all to find that out. The line 'Dont kill the speed' confused me a little and put a stutter in my rythym so perhaps you could re-arrange that. Otherwise what a nice little poem!
Hmm. it's not quite as good as your other one. But I like how it circulates, I don't think thats the right word, but I'm sure you get my point. You've great rhyming abilities. You seem to rhyme without killing your poem, unlike me.
11 years ago
I like the idea, and you have some pretty freaking awesome phrases in there, so good job!
My suggestion, should you choose to want one ;) , would be this:
Try adding a little bit more description, cause it's a bit hard to follow.